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More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending a short time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses. Why? Who benefits more from this, the community or these young people?

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There is a controversial heating
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debate over the fact that an accelerating number of young volunteers are now doing unpaid
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 to help
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 in developing countries.
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 activity and I contend that
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youngsters
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 and underprivileged citizens can
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. Without a shadow of
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, there is a myriad of reasons why
youngsters
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 from affluent nations are participating in doing unpaid
work
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 in poorer countries and one of which is they want to do good to those
communities
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. Young
people
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 always have strength and knowledge so
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 making financial contributions, they can use their insights for teaching juvenile and physical health for constructing shelters to enhance the impoverished
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’ living
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.
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, UNICEF and UNESCO are well-known organisations that have recently contributed
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 to 52million hungry
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 in Africa by giving them houses and teaching kids and
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 organisation is led maximum by young
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.
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, it is irrefutable to note that the desire to do wonders for the life of the more underprivileged
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 is the main root for
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 beneficial activity of the young. By doing so,
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 the adolescents and poor
communities
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 can
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 redeeming features from
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 optimistic unpaid
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. Apparently,
youngsters
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 can
gain
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 invaluable experience and widen their social circle with
people
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 all around the world, who are like-minded with them and fond of helping others. As for the communication, they will have higher living quality and their toddlers will be well-taught. Due to these upsides, it is undeniable to note that
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 the young and poor
communities
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 can receive the pros from the activity. In conclusion, the obvious root for
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 unpaid
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 of
youngsters
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 is that they want to contribute to the community to bring an optimistic effect on the underprivileged
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people’
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 living standard and
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 of them can
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 tremendous benefits from
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 unpaid
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