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Some people prefer to spend their holidays in resorts where everything is organized for them and they take little interest in the country they are visiting. Others prefer to travel around the country and to see how the people live, to get to know their customs and traditions and cuisine. Write an essay on which type of foreign travel you think is best for both the tourist and the local community.

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People
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 normally prefer to stay in famous and comfortable
hotels
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,
resorts
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 while spending their vacations.
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, the popularity of backpacking has recently increased.
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 I agree that these
hotels
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 can provide a cosy stay, the importance of travelling alone and living with other
people
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 around the country can not be neglected. On the one hand, these commercialised places provide all the amenities and some
people
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 really enjoy spending their holidays without any interest in local belongings. They limit themselves to these
hotels
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 and do not give a
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 thought about the unlimited adventures that the area can offer.
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,
people
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 staying in 5-star
hotels
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 prefer to stay in
hotels
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 to relax and enjoy rather than going out and see the world.
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, these
resorts
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 provide jobs to local communities and
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 improve the income index.
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 these
resorts
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 have decreased
people
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's interest in natural surroundings but have helped the domestic
people
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 by generating more jobs.
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, some
people
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 prefer to travel and stay in a local habitat where they can interact with local communities, discuss the local culture and what their area is famous for. By living among local
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, tourists actually learn to live in that particular part of the world.
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 is a win-win situation for everyone as local
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also
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 understand the different kinds of
people
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 in the world.
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, when
people
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 visit the local societies, they contribute to various factors like buying handmade products, renting a place for accommodation and
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 promoting local businesses. Taking everything into consideration, I think both
resorts
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 stay and back-packing have benefits but the latter one clearly has the advantage.
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