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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Social status
seem
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 to overpower the
values
 that the previous generation admired
such
 as power , kindness and trust for people to acknowledge one's
worthy
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worth
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 in public .l highly agree with
this
 statement because
that is
 how the world is now
Firstly
,
the
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society
seem
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 to have taken
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materialistic things to measure how an individual must be respected.
For instance
 ,
person
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the person
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 that has a beautiful big car and a luxurious house is much more respected and
houred
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hours
honoured
 compared to an individual that has
np
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 money but with all the
values
 mentioned above.
The
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Society
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society
 does not listen to the opinions of the poor rather to the rich.
Secondly
 , the most known worthy individuals are the least kind and respectful people.They usually take advantage of the poor and
the
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society
. The
values
supposedly known
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 to be leading and or guiding
the
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society
 are far less recognised nowadays. In conclusion, the world would be a better place if people were to inherit kindness, selfless and other
values
 that
guides
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the
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society
 whereas it is a task that one should practise regularly
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