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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places.

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Nowadays due to urbanization more and more families are moving from the suburbs to the
city
 ,
therefore
, some are arguing that
children
 will have
better
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 upbringing in the countryside,while others disagree with them. In
this
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 I will be discussing both the pros and the cons of
children
 growing up on the ruler side
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 the
city
 .
To begin
 with, the main advantage of
children
 growing in the
city
 is being able to have access to superior educational institutions which offer much more than academic learning.
Moreover
. Major cities have plenty of facilities
such
 as libraries and recreation
centers
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. These places provide
children
 with learning and entertainment tools.
In addition
 to that, through navigating local transportations and
city
 streets to develop
self awareness
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 in public
children
 will become more independent and mature at an early age.
However
, one of the major drawbacks of living in the
city
 is the air pollution that comes from vehicles and factories that emit gases which lead to health issues
such
 as
asmth
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warmth
smth
.
Children
 who live in the
city
 have more sedentary lives unlike those in the countryside which spend most of their day in the fresh air playing in the grass or climbing the trees.another major issue with living in the
city
 is
the
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safety . A recent study that was published in the New York Times showed that the crime rate in the suburbs is much lower than in the cities which make it a much safer place to raise
children
 in . To sum up, both living in the rural areas or in the
city
 have their own pros and cons.
At
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 the
end
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 it is up to each individual which is the more suitable place to raise
children
 in.
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