The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie graphs
depicts
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the ratio of 3 different kinds of
nutrients
in 4 types of typical meals by dividing each pie graph
in
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four sections, proportionate to their percentage. In general
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it is seen that at dinner there is
highest
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the highest
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level of harmful ingredients like sodium and saturated fat
while
at breakfast all 3 kinds of unhealthy
remains
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at the minimum level. From
analyhzing
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analysing
the graphs we can see that sodium and saturated fat is at their peak of 43% and 37% respectively in dinner,
whereas
snack contains the maximum ratio of added sugar of 42%. At
lunch
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the first two
nutrients
exist on a little more than a quarter
while
the rest ingredient exists on
one fifth
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.
Furthermore
, breakfast has
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proportion of the mentioned
nutrients
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around 15%. At the same time,
although
snack is high
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added sugar
of
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42%,
but
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it has
lower
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a lower
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percentage of the rest two
nutrients
at 14% and 21% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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