Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of technology, the media has played a pivotal role in the field of education.
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, many people are of the opinion that students will be taught better and understand the subjects in a more productive way through watching
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in school and at home .
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learning through
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has some benefits. In
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I will be discussing why I believe that it may affect the youngsters in a negative way.
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with, childhood is the period of our life where we can enjoy
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simple pleasures
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as running around with friends, climbing trees, pursuing adventures and many more. But in our
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most
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are glued to televisions and computers spending almost all their free time watching cartoons or playing video games.
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, if we introduce
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as a teaching tool
children
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will be in constant contact with television which will lead to many health issues
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as obesity and damaged eyesight.
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, when
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watch
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in school and home they will become addicted and having it as an educational tool will be an excuse for them to spend more time in front of
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.
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, television
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many programmes that contain
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amount of
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that may instigate them to behave in a bad or antisocial way. To sum up , watching
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may help students in their education. We can not
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deny
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will bring more disadvantages that could affect
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later on in their adult life .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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