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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

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What will happen if we spread bad
news
for
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wrong
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the wrong
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 persons? We tell a mother that your son is dead, but the truth is contrary to that. Presently,
news
 sources are playing
effective
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 and delicate role
in
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our
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 daily basis.
However
, some aspects are affecting the choice of
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.
Thus
, I believe that politics and business strategies are the main incentives for editors to decide the
colors
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 of verity which should share more positive
news
.
First
 of all, most politicians have their own consideration when it comes
of
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 broadcasting or printing newspapers. Actually, they think that some facts need to be preserved for later times, so the people will not panic and will not create a social disorder.
For instance
, when the
Corona virus
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 was discovered, all the governments asked both state and private
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media
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medias
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media
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 to be exact in their details in order to avoid any unexpected accidents. Another factor is related to the marketing plan of media stations and journals. These facilities aim to make
profit
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 by increasing their audience.
Therefore
, more companies will advertise their products using the breaks between the television programs or the paragraph of written presses. As result, contents' creators will try always to satisfy the majority of
public's
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 taste. Most
costumers
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customers
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 are interested in cheerful
news
 because they consider them as principal motivation. Nobody likes to hear about the suffering of our planet and its
habitants
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inhabitants
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. Problems
such
 as pollution, animal extinction, global warming death and sick cases in the hospital are
minor
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priority
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 for
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society. Usually, humans prefer to listen to
successful
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 stories on how to make more money, how to be happy or where are the best places to spend quality
times
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. In conclusion, no one has the authority to hide the data
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 others, but we can find a method to transmit our message whatever it is acceptable or regretful. I hope that our life is full of joy and happiness,
although
 the reality is often miserable.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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