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Write about advantages and disadvantages about online education

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In these past 2 or 3 years it has been really hard for us in that
covid-19
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COVID-19
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 situation, many shops, schools, universities etc. have been closed which has made
the day to day
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 life extremely hard for all of us. As a
student
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 I went from visiting
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everyday
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 and socializing with people to
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online educational format.
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 transition has been very hard for me especially at the start because I had to adapt to a new whole way of teaching and a whole new environment.There are some advantages and disadvantages of the online format. Some of the advantages are that I don’t have to travel to
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, which saves me a lot of time and it’s not that exhausting.Another advantage of being online is that you can use a wider variety of tools and sources for information.
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 a huge disadvantage is that not everyone
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good
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 internet connection and sometimes that can make it very difficult for some students to join and
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in the class.Another disadvantage of the online learning format is that
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 don’t meet with people and
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 don’t socialize as much as
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will
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was
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 in class, which sometimes can depress me and make me feel lonely and uncomfortable.In my opinion going to
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 is
better
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 way for students to learn and
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 personally think they handle the information better and quicker when they are in
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 compared to when they are sitting at home, because there are more distractions at home and sometimes students can get carried away and not listen to the teacher
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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