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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs provide the
number
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 of
students
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 in two different categories who enrol in the university of Australia over a decade year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 experienced
increase
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 gradually
whereas
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 local
students
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 had
unchanged
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an unchanged
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 trend over the period. Looking first at the enrolments of overseas
students
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. There was a steady increase in total
students
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 which was from 20,000 to just over 80,000 in 2001 and 2010 respectively.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 who commence in Australian universities rose steadily over the period,with the exception
in
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of
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 2009 and 2010. Moving on to the enrolments of local
students
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. The total
number
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 of local
students
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 started at 40,000
students
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 and
then
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 there was a slight increase from around 45,000 to approximately 58,000
students
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 in 2001 and 2006 respectively. After 2008 the total
number
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 reached a plateau
between
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of
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 just over 60,000.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 who apply to Australian universities witnessed a fluctuating trend. There was a significant rise from about 18,000 to 22,000 in 2001 and 2002 and
then
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 they dropped slightly to about 19000 in 2006. After 2006, the
number
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 of
students
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 rose again to 22,000 in 2008 before declining to 21000 in the
last
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 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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