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When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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When a new child starts
school
, he or she is eager to meet friends and
teachers
 in a new
environment
.
On the other hand
, there are
children
 who are afraid of
such
 situations. It's hard for them to go to
school
 because they are shy and scared. Some
schools
 offer
activities
 to help
students
 get close to and familiarize themselves with the
environment
 faster, but some
schools
 do not. The
school
 can help new
students
 get along with their classmates through a variety of
activities
 and
teachers
.
Schools
 can organize classes to block off time for new
students
 to interact.
Therefore
, all
students
 are strangers, which will reduce
students
' embarrassment and shyness in a strange
environment
.
In addition
, it can
also
 promote friendship among
students
.
Additionally
, the
school
 can arrange
activities
 on holidays of the year to strengthen friendships. Participating in the holiday performances allows the
children
 to unite with each other and makes them more comfortable after a hard day of studying. In middle
school
, I moved to a new house and had to go to a new
school
 that was nearby.
Initially
, I found making new friends terrifying because I did not know anyone. But thanks to the
school
's
activities
, after moving in for a short time, I made quite a few friends and we still play together.
However
, it is not enough for the
school
 to help,
teachers
 are
also
 required. Teacher-student relationships are much closer than those between a
school
 and its
students
, making it easier for them to learn and adapt. Due to the different teaching methods at each
school
, many
children
 are not yet accustomed to the new method when changing
schools
, so their grades are affected. It is the responsibility of
teachers
 to pay more attention and help
students
, especially in subjects with low scores.
Likewise
, my sister transferred
schools
 for the same reason as me, and the new
school
 uses a different teaching method than her old
school
. It was impossible for her to answer the teacher's question since the method was too different from the old teacher. Having researched and learned, her teacher taught her again and transferred her to a classmate, where she could tutor and help. In general, transferring
schools
 is not a big deal for us, but for a lot of kids, it is quite a terrifying event.
Consequently
, the
school
 and
teachers
 must care for and help the
children
 more so that they can adapt to the new
environment
.
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