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At present, the population of some countries consistss relatively older people than young people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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make wiser and more logical decisions especially in competitive markets.
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, from a career development perspective, studying on
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set
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 of courses provides an invaluable addition to a manager’s curriculum and puts her/him in the forefront of the field, paving the path to work in the most known and successful companies. I am very hopeful to be a part of
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 program, collaborating with the students there, contributing to mentioned professors’ researches, and hopefully forming and developing my own
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. I am sure that my intention to participate in
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Management
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 Science program doesn’t come merely from my interest. I believe I have got a good understanding of
management
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 science after studying in two of the finest universities in Iran and working
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years professionally. Working in
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 division of MTN Irancell , the firs and biggest data operator in Iran
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 provided the opportunity for me to gain the needed capabilities like systematic and strategic thinking, risk
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 and data validation. I was very helpful there as my idea for
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the BTS
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 rollout procedure lessened the duration
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by 30
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% and increased the monthly cashflow by receiving income 10 days earlier each month. On top of that, working in the first Neo digital bank in Iran, blu, assisted me to experience a high-speed growing startup environment and approach problems from a holistic perspective and see each factor/issue as part of the bigger picture. I am self-motivated while I have been a
hard-worker
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 and committed person, and have the passion to become more and more successful in my job career.
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, I am confident that I have the guts and the potential to gain
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 necessary skills rapidly. The
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 Science program by providing a thoughtful combination of courses and researches, and the chance to work
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 knowledgeable professors, helps me deepen my knowledge of “Information Technology
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”, enhances my skills as a manager and researcher, and hopefully prepares me for a better career in my field of interest. I believe studying at
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Ryerson University is exciting, is a unique and challenging opportunity, and adds much meaning to the life of anyone who wins it. I wish I can be the one.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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