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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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Two
Correct article usage
The two
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 maps below illustrate access to the
road
 to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. As we can see from the maps there were considerable changes made in the
year
 2010 to the hospital
road
 connecting to
city
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the city
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road
 and
new
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the new
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 parking facility beside the hospital building.
Also
, changes were done at the main entrance by making a roundabout to facilitate
the
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apply
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car parking. Now if we closely look at the prospered changes made in the
year
 2010, we can see that there are two new roundabouts had been made in the new
road
 layout design to smooth the flow of the traffic coming from the main city
road
 towards the hospital, and
also
 a bus station for the public transport.
Whereas
this
 was missing in the original layout plan of the hospital in the
year
 2007.
Furthermore
, there was only one place for car parking for the public and for the staff as well,
that
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which
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 had now been built separately. Another noticeable change made in the
year
 2010 is
the
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that
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 only
one
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bus stop
instead
 of many, as it was in the
year
 2007.
To sum up
, the new design was made by keeping in mind to smooth the flow of traffic and facilitate the parking for both staff and
ordinary
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the ordinary
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 public.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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