Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school. Some people believe that this is a negative development while others think there are some benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion .

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These days جملة لتعميم الموضوع . So,some

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think that الرأي الاول ,

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that الرأي الاخر .

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essay will discuss Both sides and will draw my personal conclusion . الطرف الغير مؤيد ( Unsupportive party) In one hand الجملة الرئسيه للفكرة ، ( ssتوضيح الفكرة).

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, مثال على الفكرة .so,

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why some think that الرأي يساند الفكرة . الطرف المؤيد ( Supporter )

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, الجملة الرئسية , ss توضيح الفكرة . To illustrate , مثال على الفكرة .

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the belief that رأي مساند .

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جملة الرئسية ، ss توضيح الفكرة . For an instanc , مثال على فكرة .

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proves clearly that الرأي المساند . الخاتمة ( Conclusion ) In conclusion , after a careful analysis of both

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, l believe that الرأي الشخصي ، ss جملة ختامية .

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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some parents worried about increasing level of violence in T.V, video games and other types entertainment for children leisure. how does this affect children . how do you think problem can be tackled?

City planners tend to arrange schools, homes ,shops and offices in specific areas and separate them from each other . Do you think the advantage overweight the disadvantage?