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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Sana, I hope you are doing well. I'm writing to give you some advice
for
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 your upcoming camping holiday. I believe that you will have
great
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summertime
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summer time
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in
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 the Green Mountain Camp. It is a wonderful place to feel natural scenes and release your stressful works.
Furthermore
, you would be meet new friends who are very kind and
humourous
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. They are always enthusiastic to guide their experiences.
However
, there are some problems
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 camp in the mountain.
First
, because insects like bugs or flies are everywhere, you should bring a net to protect yourself.
Secondly
,
this
 place is far from the main street, so it is difficult to buy stuff or
foods
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. You should prepare all
necessary
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 things. I regret that my course is going
to begin
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this
 week, so I can't travel with you. I hope to hear
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 experiences, why don't we hang out after you return? Wish you all the best, Wendy.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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