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In many parts of the world families were larger in the past because people had more children.Do you think they were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a larger family in the past.

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It is true that in the
last
 century, many families around the world formed a large family because of the large number of children. While I understand that critics may see
this
 as family integrity.I believe that there are more drawbacks than benefits. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of being part of a large family.One of the main positives of being a large family is that a large family environment helps a person to be kind to each other and solve any problems together.
Secondly
, in large families can be all sides
such
 as pros and cons about ideas or work balance so on and broadens your horizons,
that is
 mean that you could learn out of life. Turning to the other side of the argument,material,
that is
 the lack of funds. Many families unemployment can be a problem leading to financial hardship. Another issue is that disagreements between family members.
In other words
,the noise of the children and the anguish of moneyless ness ,and the fact that some contradictions have arisen. All things considered to being part of a larger family is not very nice. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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