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People should work a fixed number of hours per week and employers should not ask anybody to work extra hours. discuss both of views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the growth of competition, there is a need for people to
work
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 extra hours per week
and
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 managers should
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 encourage their team members to invest more
time
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.
On the other hand
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, many humans believe that in order to remain healthy and
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stress-free
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 free they should only
work
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 for a fixed number of hours and avoid overtime.
This
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 essay will
further
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 discuss both perspectives with relevant examples.
To begin
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 with, in the present world of competition, it is very important to invest more
time
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on
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 the job as it demands it. Giving more
time
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 to
work
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 does not mean that one should compromise their family/social life
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, but
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to
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rather to
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 meet the commitments. Employees should do overtime only when it is required. It should not affect their health.
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, many companies that have a culture of flexible
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 timings are more productive and successful as compared to those that do not.
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,
organizations
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organisations
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,
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apply
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 where employees do their 9
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5 jobs
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 are less productive.
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, the chances of their growth and promotion
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 decrease.
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 they go home timely and spend quality
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 with family, they are unable to justify their
work
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 to their managers.
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, workers of many government
organizations
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 are unable to grow their careers because of the traditional mindset of fixed timings. In conclusion, one should not make a habit of overtime as it will impact
the
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 health and social life. People should be ready to give extra
time
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 to their
work
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 whenever required or to fulfil their commitments.

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task response
Be clear about your view in the first paragraph and restate it in the last.
language use
Use short, simple sentences and common words to avoid mistakes.
content
Give more specific ideas or facts to back up your points.
structure
The essay has a real structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
argument
You show both sides of the debate.
content
There are examples to back up points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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