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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to parents. In your letter 1. Explain you would like the job 2. give details of why you would be suitable person to employ 3. say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir,
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 is regarding your advertisement published in Australian magazine dated on 16.12.2021 for the requirement of child care person. My name is Shravan, I am a resident of Mira road and I will be interested in
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 position. Sir, I like to spend time with the children and currently looking for a similar job profile.
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, I am a certified professional in the hospitality of young children. I have been given very structured training to understand child psychology and their needs, And
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accordingly
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 we plan daily
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 and activities which will help children to learn and grow. I have almost six years of experience in child care in which I have always stayed with the family at least for 7 months. As already mentioned I am a certified professional, So I spend time with kids in a very organized way by doing numerous activities, like playing puzzles, going for
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 with kids in the garden, doing some outdoor activities to make them fit, involving them with their friends to enhance their social skills.
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 follow a very healthy diet plan for them in order to keep them healthy. Yours faithfully Shravan Yadav
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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