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In some countries, more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college, university, or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a heated debate on whether young adults should live with their
parents
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 after they step into society. In my opinion, living alone is better for their long-term development
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 there are a few advantages to living with the
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 at the moment. As it may be known to all, the rental in the megacities is extremely high and it might take one
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 or even half of the fresh graduate’s monthly earnings. Staying with the
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 would reduce a large number of living expenses. Apart from the economic benefits, we could spend more time with our
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 while we have tight schedules every day.
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, if we live in different places with our
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, after a 12-hour shift, we might not want to pop into our
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’ home for dinner, and would rather go straight to our own place.
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 there are some obvious benefits to living with
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, the drawbacks for adults who do not have their own places are
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 significant.
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 with, if an adult does not have experience of living on his own, he probably does not know how to cook or how to do housework and
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 he lacks the essential life skills or he might be incapable of solving things independently.
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, I believe both ourselves and our
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 want more personal spaces at home. Not all families are rich and have a spacious living area, most of the houses cannot provide enough spaces or privacy for every individual.
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 to
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, the lifestyle of the young generation is quite different from the elder people,
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, there might be more unhappy issues arose if we live with our
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. All things considered, despite there being a few good things to live with
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, I still believe it is better for young people to live on their own.
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