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Now a days, Many People have to work longer hours, and then feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons for stress at the workplace? What can employer do to make their employee's life easier?

In the present time,
employees
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 have a portion of the
workload
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 of their profession
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. Moreover
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, they have pressure to accomplish work on unrealistic deadlines.
Due to
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this
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, Individuals have to deal with a lot of
stress
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. In
this
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 essay, I will try to shed some light on what are the major reasons
behind
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why individuals are dealing with
stress
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 these days and try to explain the right solution that managers can
do
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implement
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 to
wipe
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alleviate
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 out
weight
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stress
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from
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 their team.
To begin
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 with, the
workload
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 is a great reason for
staff
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 members'
stress
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.
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for
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For
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 instance, every company wants to earn more and to achieve
this
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, they try to do different kinds of new ideas and to make
that
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those
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idea
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ideas
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 realistic, they give an excessive amount of
task
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tasks
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 to their workers.
Moreover
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, they
also
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 give unrealistic deadlines to their
staff
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. Most of the time team
try
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 their best to complete
that
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the
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 task on a date
but
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 sometimes they do not
get
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success
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 in the task
and
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 they start taking weight about performance.
Furthermore
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, Lack of place security is
also
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 a possible reason why
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organization
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organisation
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 member takes the
stress
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.
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for
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 example, when an employee fails to do their work on a given
date
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date,
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 many companies fire the worker and find a new operator.
Due to
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this
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 ,some
employees
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 put an excessive amount of
stress
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 on their minds.
On the other hand
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, employers can do a lot of things to eliminate
stress
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 from their
employees
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such
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 as
sign
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signing
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 up more
staff
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. As we
know
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know,
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employees
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 have a lot of
workload
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 on them
but
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, but
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 if companies hire more
employees
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,
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then
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 the
workload
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 from other
staff
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 will
deduct
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be reduced
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.
In addition
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, if companies want to reduce
stress
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from
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among
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 their
workers
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workers,
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then
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 they can improve the environment of the workplace by giving more freedom to their workers.
To conclude
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, an employee has to deal with an excessive amount of weight on their job
but
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, but
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 it can be reduced by employers if they put some
effects
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effort
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 and try to change the environment of the workplace.

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task
Make the main ideas clear in each paragraph. Give 2 reasons and 2 fixes with short, real life examples.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and cause and effect. Keep sentences short and stick to one idea at a time.
grammar
Check grammar and use easy words. Fix errors like 'place security' to 'job security'.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short intro and end with a short end.
style
Keep tone formal and calm. Do not repeat the same words.
content
Clear plan and topic.
structure
Body has good ideas.
content
Starts well and ends with a point.

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