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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are some
languages
, which are going to be overthrown because the number of
people
 who are speaking these
languages
are
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 few. Some
people
though
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thought
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, the
government
 should specify a specific amount of public money to save these
languages
,
on the other hand
, other groups of
people
 believe it is just wasting of money. According to my opinion,
this
 is a normal process. Every
language
 and its speakers have a specific time after that time, they are going to be extinct ,
however
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 if we keep the
languages
 alive
that is
 a good idea, which can help a culture related to
language
 to be alive.
Firstly
, the
government
 should put other things
in
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priority
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a priority
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.
For instance
, health issues, the
economy
, unemployed
people
 and in the end the issue of culture and
languages
. Because
people
 can't live without some essential staff for life, to say
in other words
, if a
language
demolish
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people
 would be able to continue their life. But if they have problems in regard to health or the
economy
 they would encounter too many
of
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difficulties.
On the other hand
, if the
government
 work in regards to cultures and
languages
 it can help to have more tourists,which is a good source of income. Because when a
language
 is going to vanish, the culture related to
language
 will
also
 extinct.
Therefore
, the interest of tourists will decrease cause there wouldn't be anything interested in tourism, which has a direct effect on the
economy
 especial in the country, where there most of the income comes from tourism. To sum up the topic,
this
 is not a bad idea to spend money on
languages
 to be alive if the
government
 has a good
economy
 and their income stand on tourism.
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