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many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on environment, eating habits and families ? to what extent do you agree and disagree?

#food #industry #effect #environment #habits #families
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Fast
food
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 is prevalent nowadays . it is easily available and high in demand among the youngsters;
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, many believe that fast
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 industries have some detrimental negative effects : milieu, eating routines and families. I completely agree with the notion. To commence with the major impact on the biosphere . huge plastics are being used by
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 companies for the packaging of snack products
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 hard to dispose of after use;
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, it is the main reason for to increase in water and air pollution. To illustrate, the demand for plastic has increased in
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 industries as it inclines the demand for
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 products:
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, the level of pollution is
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 burgeoning .
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, junk foods are admired by most of the masses, especially the youngsters. According to the 'Hindustan Time' report , the consumption of packaging
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 is being boomed by ten per cent every year and it put the severe effect on health . Those personages who consume more packed
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 , suffer from various acute health issues;
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, they consume high intrusive calories that make them obese and upsurge their cholesterol level;
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, it is fruitful to avoid junk meals.
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, it affects the families tradition as the majority of the population like to eat outside because of the easy availability of fast
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 and their hectic schedule, they believe it is better to eat at reasturant rather than to cook at home . In previous times, populaces made
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 at house , sat together and consume , it assists them to make stronger bonds;
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, homo sapiens prefer to eat outside;
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, it leads to making weaker bonds in families. To recapitulate , it is ostensible , junk
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 has several pessimistic impacts ,not only on the ecosystem but
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 on eating habits and relationships .
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