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In some countries, people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development?

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We live in an age when many of us are
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 extra hours at
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 believe that it
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brings many positive benefits.
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 and its two opposite sides. To start with,
this
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work
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 that, some citizens
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 at
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 because they want to have a higher position in the company.
On the other hand
,
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, ignore health, their family, friends,.. those coins are useless. To make it easier to understand, money cannot afford individuals happiness and healthiness.
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, a person all day works only in the company, does not go out, relax with friends. They will have
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 and
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 friends every day their circle of communication has narrowed. In conclusion, some individuals still spend extra hours at
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 best for a better life. My own view on the matter is they should
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balance
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 and daily life
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  • prevalent
  • economic pressures
  • financial stability
  • competitive job markets
  • corporate cultures
  • stigma
  • demonstrate dedication
  • advent of technology
  • blurred the lines
  • accelerated career progression
  • dedicated employee
  • significant negative implications
  • stress levels
  • mental health
  • physical health
  • social and family time
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
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