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Some people believe that children leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Some people believe that
children
's
leisure
activities
 must be educational,
otherwise
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 they are a complete waste of
time
. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience. • You should write at least 250 words. • You should spend about 40 minutes on
this
 task. The most common belief among parents
nowaday
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nowadays
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 is that
children
's
leisure
activities
 must be educational,
otherwise
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,otherwise
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 they are a complete waste of
time
. Opposed to that normally accepted point of view, I have to disagree. In my opinion,
leisure
activities
 should be enjoyable, rather than serious and dull.
First
 of all,
children
 should have
time
 for themselves but not for anyone else. It is a basic demand of a human being to be pleased with whatever they do as long as it is still acceptable on a level.
For instance
, playing video
games
. Many parents do not like their kids to interact with that “unreal world”. Yes, there are definitely some certain drawbacks of playing video
games
 like overplaying it or getting
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 to it; but above that, let’s take a look at the bright side.
Beside
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Besides
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 some violent, horror, obsessive and unhealthy
games
, there are plenty more
games
 that contain educational materials in which
children
 can learn new knowledge in a more exciting but indirect way.
Secondly
, sometimes
leisure
activities
 are not only hobbies but they are the reflection of the
children
’s own personalities. From my observation
upon
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 the environment I live in, I have seen many
children
 with different favourite
leisure
activities
. Some like football, some like drawing and some like cooking,... There is a huge variety and so is the difference;
therefore
, it is mostly inaccurate to assume that all these
activities
 have
the
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 educational purpose on them. But
this
 is not about liking something, these
activities
 are more than that, they can define
children
’s dreams. A game programmer would only want to become a programmer when they love
games
, and so the footballers, artists, chefs and many more. In conclusion, I think that fathers and mothers should not be too harsh on their
children
 by imposing their opinion about doing
leisure
activities
;
instead
, let them freely have their pick of what they want to do because none of those is a waste of
time
, whether they are educational or not.
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