Some people believe that children leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Some people believe that
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leisure
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activities
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must be educational,
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otherwise
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they are a complete waste of
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. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience. • You should write at least 250 words. • You should spend about 40 minutes on
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task. The most common belief among parents
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is that
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's
leisure
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activities
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must be educational,
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otherwise
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they are a complete waste of
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. Opposed to that normally accepted point of view, I have to disagree. In my opinion,
leisure
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activities
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should be enjoyable, rather than serious and dull.
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of all,
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should have
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for themselves but not for anyone else. It is a basic demand of a human being to be pleased with whatever they do as long as it is still acceptable on a level.
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, playing video
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. Many parents do not like their kids to interact with that “unreal world”. Yes, there are definitely some certain drawbacks of playing video
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like overplaying it or getting
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to it; but above that, let’s take a look at the bright side.
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some violent, horror, obsessive and unhealthy
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, there are plenty more
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that contain educational materials in which
children
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can learn new knowledge in a more exciting but indirect way.
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, sometimes
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activities
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are not only hobbies but they are the reflection of the
children
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’s own personalities. From my observation
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the environment I live in, I have seen many
children
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with different favourite
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activities
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. Some like football, some like drawing and some like cooking,... There is a huge variety and so is the difference;
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, it is mostly inaccurate to assume that all these
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have
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educational purpose on them. But
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is not about liking something, these
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are more than that, they can define
children
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’s dreams. A game programmer would only want to become a programmer when they love
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, and so the footballers, artists, chefs and many more. In conclusion, I think that fathers and mothers should not be too harsh on their
children
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by imposing their opinion about doing
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activities
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;
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, let them freely have their pick of what they want to do because none of those is a waste of
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, whether they are educational or not.
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