Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion?
Time
management is the best thing that every person follow. People have their own choices that how much time
spend on every activities
. Whatever, I will discuss that Change to a singular noun
activity
compunies
either Correct your spelling
companies
spends
their Change the verb form
spend
employees
time
in others activities or spend whole time
for work
. At
the end, I give my opinion as well.
We see surrounding us that every person Change the preposition
In
have
to Change the verb form
has
focusing
on their fitness. On behalf of, Change the verb form
focus
Compunies
should give Correct your spelling
Companies
time
to their employees
for exercise
. Firstly
, Exercise
is the things
which Fix the agreement mistake
thing
refreshing
Wrong verb form
refreshes
mind
within few times. Correct article usage
the mind
Employees
have lots of work load
and they Correct your spelling
workload
feels
too much stress. Change the verb form
feel
For example
, Many compunies
are constructing Correct your spelling
companies
Correct article usage
a gym
gym
in their Fix the agreement mistake
gyms
field
Correct your spelling
fieldwork
work
. They also
make rules for employees
for their fitness reasons. Secondly
, Employees
have losts
of Correct your spelling
lots
work
on their working schedule so they do not have time
for exercise
. Forethat
, Correct your spelling
For that
Compunies
should change Correct your spelling
Companies
time
schedule and give some time
for exercise
. Two things has
been happening that employee Change the verb form
have
manage
both things at one Change the verb form
manages
time
.
On the second
side, Compunies
are more focused on Correct your spelling
Companies
work
. First
, There
are lots of Correct your spelling
there
Compunies
construction in today's world. Meanwhile, Competition Correct your spelling
Companies
have
been Change the verb form
has
promoting
together and if any Wrong verb form
promoted
Compuny
wants to become Correct your spelling
Company
first
place for that man Add an article
the first
work
needs more. For example
, Employees
take more time
giving in their work
so automatically good results pop-out. Secondly
,Every compunies
Correct your spelling
companies
work
for their fam in the world. Forethat
, Correct your spelling
For that
Employees
work
as quantity and quality for time
rather focusing on exercise
.
In conclusion, Every countries
have become proud Change to a singular noun
country
if
any famous Correct your spelling
of
compunies
Correct your spelling
companies
work
for their countries. Due to many reasons
as I mentioned above, Add a comma
,reasons
compunies
should Correct your spelling
companies
given
Change the verb form
give
be given
time
for exercise
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite