Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion?

Time
management is the best thing that every person follow. People have their own choices that how much
time
spend on every
activities
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. Whatever, I will discuss that
compunies
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companies
either
spends
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their
employees
time
in others activities or spend whole
time
for
work
.
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the end, I give my opinion as well. We see surrounding us that every person
have
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to
focusing
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on their fitness. On behalf of,
Compunies
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Companies
should give
time
to their
employees
for
exercise
.
Firstly
,
Exercise
is the
things
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which
refreshing
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mind
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the mind
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within few times.
Employees
have lots of
work load
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and they
feels
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too much stress.
For example
, Many
compunies
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companies
are constructing
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a gym
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gym
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gyms
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in their
field
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fieldwork
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work
. They
also
make rules for
employees
for their fitness reasons.
Secondly
,
Employees
have
losts
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lots
of
work
on their working schedule so they do not have
time
for
exercise
.
Forethat
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For that
,
Compunies
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Companies
should change
time
schedule and give some
time
for
exercise
. Two things
has
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been happening that employee
manage
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both things at one
time
. On the
second
side,
Compunies
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Companies
are more focused on
work
.
First
,
There
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are lots of
Compunies
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Companies
construction in today's world. Meanwhile, Competition
have
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been
promoting
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together and if any
Compuny
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Company
wants to become
first
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place for that man
work
needs more.
For example
,
Employees
take more
time
giving in their
work
so automatically good results pop-out.
Secondly
,Every
compunies
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companies
work
for their fam in the world.
Forethat
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For that
,
Employees
work
as quantity and quality for
time
rather focusing on
exercise
. In conclusion, Every
countries
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country
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have become proud
if
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any famous
compunies
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companies
work
for their countries. Due to many
reasons
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as I mentioned above,
compunies
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companies
should
given
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give
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time
for
exercise
.
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