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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam". How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent decays, there is a view that a climbing number of
people
use
 their own
vehicles
 for daily routines and make a heavy
traffic
 jam and
this
 issue has become worse by passing time.
This
 essay will discuss the views about the relationship between
car
 ownership and
traffic
in addition
 to my opinion which is agreeing to the direct relationship between increasing
car
 ownership and making bigger
traffic
 jams.
This
 essay
also
 states some measures which
government
 must take to decrease the individual's tendency to
use
 their
cars
. On one hand, humans' tendency to
use
cars
 has dramatically rocketed due to the fact that they want to transport easily every day.
For example
, they
use
 their own
cars
 to go to work, go shopping and stuff like that.
In addition
 to
this
, because of the increasing materialistic approach as well as increasing the level of jealousy among
people
, they must surely buy a new
car
 and drive it everywhere.
As a result
, the city faces heavy
traffic
 jam that definitely disturbs the daily routine works.
For instance
, in ,Iran every household has at least two
cars
 and they drive it to a place
that is
 far from about 1 kilometre. It is disastrous and ,
,
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 most
people
 must wait for at least 30 minutes behind
traffic
 lights.
On the other hand
, it is obligatory that
government
 must take some important measurement to control
traffic
 jams. The most important thing they must do is eliminate the tendency of
people
 to
use
 their
cars
. The
first
 action they should do is encourage
people
 to
use
 public transportation
vehicles
such
 as buses, the metro and things like that. In order to
people
 encourage to
use
 its
government
 must decrease the transportation expenses and
also
 increase the number of public
vehicles
, so they move with a regular program and
as a result
,
people
 arrive at their destination at the right time.
For instance
, London doubled their urban buses and they witness more than 50 million
people
 did not drive.
Moreover
, the
government
 must enhance the
car
 tax as well as
car
 prices so that a majority of
people
 cannot pay for them. The USA increased
car
 tax by 60 per cent and they witness more than 60 million
cars
 are not driven for years. By the way of conclusion, I believe that
car
 ownership is increasing nowadays and we witness a high
traffic
 jam, so
government
 must take measurements like using public transportation, increasing
car
 prices and
car
 taxes to encourage
people
 to walk or
use
 public transport
vehicles
.
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