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THE TWO MAPS BELOW SHOW ROAD ACCESS TO A CITY HOSPITAL IN 2007 AND IN 2010.

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the two maps give information about the modification of the
city
 and hospital
road
 that access to a
city
 hospital in 2007 and 2010. overall, more space for packing and the new
bus
 station was built. it is noticeable that the parking area on the
first
 map, was in the corner of hospital
road
 and
city
road
, the car park was shared between hospital staff and the public to use,
however
, look at the map in 2010, the new parking was built in the eastern part of the hospital, the original parking became staff use only. look closer, the hospital
road
 in 2007, on its either side were alone by 3
bus
 stops,
hence
, in 2010, the
bus
 stops were replaced to the new
bus
 station, which in the west south side of the hospital, the
bus
 station has two entries that can travel from either two roundabouts that were built between ring
road
 and hospital, hospital and
city
road
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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