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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online learning.

In recent years, there has been a lot of online learning
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operating because of the pandemic. Some people assume that online learning is inefficient.
However
, others argue that online learning has some benefits. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the positive and negative aspects of online learning. On the one hand, there are several merits of online learning.
To begin
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COVID-19, people are wearing a mask and keeping their distance from each other. In
this
 situation, the school is supposed to take care of
students
' health.
It is clear that
 attending school during
this
 period has a lot of dangers.
Moreover
, through learning online,
students
 will access an enormous amount of information and
also
 be able to communicate their assignments in
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.
Therefore
, online learning is good for accessing data and getting quick feedback from teachers.
On the other hand
, online learning has drawbacks as well.
Firstly
, cooperation with classmates is one of
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students
' socialization. Especially, children necessarily need to learn to communicate with others. That experience is not only good for their socialization
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 but
also
 for building childhood memories.
Secondly
, the quality of experience can be lower than taking the real class. To illustrate
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science class. Mostly, there are a lot of activities which can be participated by
students
 to get a specific result.
Hence
, most online course has a lower quality of experience than real-class.
To sum up
, as mentioned above, online learning,
although
 having a few drawbacks, is more likely to have benefits in
this
 pandemic situation. The most important factor is health despite having a lower concentration.
Therefore
, it is advisable that teachers' effort is necessary.
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task response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses the question prompt with balanced discussion of advantages and disadvantages of online learning. Provide specific examples to support the points made.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure and organization of ideas. Use linking words and cohesive devices to better connect ideas and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used and work on using more precise and appropriate words and phrases to convey meaning effectively.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure, punctuation, and use of grammatical structures to improve accuracy and clarity of the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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  • job market
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