Many governments think that economic progress is their most important.Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Governments
all around the world, have huge responsibilities to carry on like economic.
Although
there are many
governments
from different nations which
are solely focus
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on the
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rather than other aspects.while others possess the opposite mindest that they believe other features like education, social conditions and security are equally significant for the advancement of countries.Personally,I have the same opinion
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the
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group and as far as I'm concerned,ty
economic
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should not be an only goal for
governments
. On the one hand, many countries put all their efforts to develop merely economic issues and because of
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they do not even improve in any prospects.To cue evidence,Iran is not an advanced country and in recent 40 years they just want to improve in an economy, but obviously,
besides
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.So,in my perspective,
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education and other aspects are equally important. On the flip side,
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industrialization and
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financial management make
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that they have economic stability and
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that they will see the progression in other sights too.
For instance
,
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States Of America is
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powerful country in the economy and other
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.
Moreover
,
this
is one of the most effective
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that their politics use to ameliorate their societies. To draw a conclusion, unequivocally, there is no doubt, that economic progress should be an important aim for a government,but from my point of view, other aspects like education, health care and many other things are significant for the progress of each country.
Finally
, politics should put
equall
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equal
equally
budgets on each section if they want to see advancement in their communities.
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