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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important.Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Governments
 all around the world, have huge responsibilities to carry on like economic.
Although
 there are many
governments
 from different nations which
are solely focus
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 on the
economic
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 rather than other aspects.while others possess the opposite mindest that they believe other features like education, social conditions and security are equally significant for the advancement of countries.Personally,I have the same opinion
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 the
second
 group and as far as I'm concerned,ty
economic
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 should not be an only goal for
governments
. On the one hand, many countries put all their efforts to develop merely economic issues and because of
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 they do not even improve in any prospects.To cue evidence,Iran is not an advanced country and in recent 40 years they just want to improve in an economy, but obviously,
besides
 that, they cannot even control epidemic diseases like
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Corona virus
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.So,in my perspective,
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education and other aspects are equally important. On the flip side,
the
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 industrialization and
the
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financial management make
governments
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 that they have economic stability and
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that they will see the progression in other sights too.
For instance
,
United
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 States Of America is
the
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 powerful country in the economy and other
statues
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.
Moreover
,
this
 is one of the most effective
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 that their politics use to ameliorate their societies. To draw a conclusion, unequivocally, there is no doubt, that economic progress should be an important aim for a government,but from my point of view, other aspects like education, health care and many other things are significant for the progress of each country.
Finally
, politics should put
equall
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equal
equally
 budgets on each section if they want to see advancement in their communities.
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