Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

It’s believed and research and that features that
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do not interact on his or her personality dramatically . I can absolutely
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the
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however
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more intelligent or
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changeable mood,
nevertheless
,
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surrounding
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after hurting
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or loss and betrayal of close friends or relatives. To conclude, I want to say that in
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there are
characters
that can be worked out and those ones that only can be born with.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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