Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is a dramatic change in how people are living.Society has forgotten the purpose brought about by tradition or sacred festivals.

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,during celebration periods,a community currently want to have fun solely.In my view,

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is a grey area that

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disagree with that the festive

season

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have

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not been put on the front line.

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,the festive

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is a period to enjoy through entertainments,buying and receiving gifts

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that the society spend funds which were not planned for to make the

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meaningful.To illustrate more,people travel

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to worship together with senior citizens

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,they go ahead to slaughter a goat and have some drinks.

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research done by homecare in 2000 shows that 60% of festivity take place in rural areas.

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,end of year celebrations are imperative in uniting family and every person has a reason to celebrate the

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.

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,the bad economic time has facilitated families to utilize the little funds on their small unit.

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,the need to cater for basic needs has forced many parents to be on duty during the period others are having fun.

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technology is very significant in the modern era

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that they would rather spend the day watching movies than uniting with other people for entertainment.

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,in 2021 the star newspapers indicated that 60% of graduates spend festivity praying video games.

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,it is due to many responsibilities that have overtaken the

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of being together with acquaintances

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partly. To sum up,holidays are fundamental in the world and meaningful

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they create memory due to many activities that take place

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,technology and many responsibilities have facilitated many to do it on their own.