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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job You should write at least 150 words.

#country #study #job #friend #lives #help #plans
Hello Alex, I know that you heard that I will travel soon to your country. In fact, I got accepted
in
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 one of the universities in your town, and I am planning to get a job in parallel to my studies.
Therefore
, can I have
you
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your
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 assistance in
this
 subject? Actually, I will arrive
to
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at
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 the airport
next
saturday
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Saturday
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 where a taxi will take
to
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me to
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 my student flat inside the campus. Speaking of my domain, I chose to learn more about green energy during
two-years
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a two-years
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 master's degree program, and
this
 university is considered one of the most
competitve
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competitive
compatible
 around the world. As you know, I am
foreign
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 citizen with a limited budget that could not be sufficient to pay all my costs
such
 as
accommadation
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accommodation
, tuition fees and other activities. So, working as
part-time
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a part-time
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 employee will be the most convenient option in order to cover my financial needs.
In
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On
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the other hand, I heard that your father own a fast-food restaurant. I will much appreciate
if
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 you could ask him to find me a position there as a waiter,
assitant
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assistant
 chef or even a delivery man. Thank you in advance for your support and affection, I can not wait until we meet again at your place. Sincerely yours, Ali Hammoud
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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