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Discipline is an ever increasing problem in moden schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others thỉnk that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There is irrefutable evidence that
discipline
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 is a big issue in modern schools;
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, opinions are mixed regarding it. Whilst some are of the opinion that instructors should be responsible
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discipline
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school
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. Others claim that
parents
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 who should take
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 mission. In my perspective, I am in
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with
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 the former view. There are a few reasons why
discipline
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 is the role of teachers. One explanation why some support
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 point of view is that students often spend most of their time in
school
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 ,and if teachers put their roles in the class , that may influence students'
behavior
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 positively .
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 , pupils will get used to
discipline
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 as a habit because they follow the instruction every day.
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, In most countries around the world, most kids in
school
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 do morning assembly every day. Many people
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 assume that most students get their teachers as
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. A plethora of young people behave like their instructors when they like them and believe
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 their thoughts.
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, there are some who feel that
parents
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 are responsible
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discipline
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. One explanation why some support
this
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 point of view is that kids get their essential habits from their fathers, mothers, or both. When
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a child
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 in his/
her
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 early age , they stay most of their time with their
parents
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 , and they mime them and learn
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 them. Another convincing explanation is that roles
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established at home, they
are really matter
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.If
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a father
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 or mother put clear instructions for their kids, it may help them in real life.
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,
parents
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 can train their children to clean their rooms after they wake up
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 the ground of feel responsible. By way of conclusion, There has a mixed reaction about
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 subject. My own considered opinion is that
school
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important
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 role in
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mor
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more
 than home.
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