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You are living in the university complex, and you have a problem with loud noise from a campus restaurants that stays open until midnight. Write a letter to higher authorities of the university. - Complain about the situation - Why this is a problem? - Propose way to reduce the noise?

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Dear Sir / Madam I have been residing in
3rd
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the 3rd
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block
 of
University
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the University
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students
 complex. Today, I am writing
this
 letter to make a
complain
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complaint
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 about the
university
cafeteria
 located at
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of the
University
 ground.
The most
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Most
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 of the
University
 campus
cafeteria
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cafeterias
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closes
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 at 10 pm;
however
 one of the
cafeteria
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 has the permission from
university
 department to stay up until midnight to serve
students
 need. To get
students
 attention,
canteen
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the canteen
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 put some noisy music around the
front-door
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front door
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 of
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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everyday
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 after 10 pm.
Therefore
, I would like to make a
complain
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complaint
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 about the booming music.
This
 is a serious problem specifically for 3rd
block
students
 because
this
block
 is behind
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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 and
studnets
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students
 are experiencing
high
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a high
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 volume of noise
everyday
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 after 10 pm. Most
of
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students
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the students
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 in
this
 complex are the
last
 year
students
 who burn their midnight oil to get higher results but they are unable to concentrate on their studies because of noisy music. I would like to propose
plan
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a plan
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 which will assist
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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owner
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 as well as 3rd
block
students
. To acquire attention from
students
,
cafeteria
 owner should keep their speaker
at
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on
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 the other side of the ground near to the
university
 building wall which will reduce the noise for 3rd
block
students
. Expecting reply and action against
caferia
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cafeteria
 owner as soon as possible.
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