some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give opinions
Many people think that It is the best way to acknowledge any terrible circumstances in their
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instance
a job that they are unsatisfiedAdd the comma(s)
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well as lack of money. While others disagree with the idea and think that they have to attempt and refine Change preposition
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this situations
. In the following paragraph, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before the conclusion Change the determiner
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reached.
On the one hand, the major reason that people believe that they should accept any bad situations is that they do not have Correct your spelling
is
good
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a good
opportunity
in their Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
life
. In other words
, the majority of children who live with their poor families do not have the chance to study in school because they are scarce of
money. Change preposition
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Moreover
, they do not access any public services. To illustrate, many immigrants in Thailand have not obtained identification card
yet. Fix the agreement mistake
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As a result
, they do not have the right to do any jobs in Thailand illegally.
On the other hand
, one of the reasons that folk try to improve their awful circumstances is that they would like to have a better life
. For example
, some poor students attempt to work hard in order to acquire a scholarship to study, which will provide them the
chance to have good career paths. On top of that, They would like to be acceptable. In simple terms, many adults who were looked down on will try to make their Add the preposition
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life
better and more admirable.
To summarize, although
there are many reasons that people believe that they should accept unfavourable situations, I strongly agree that folk should improve those circumstances so that their life
will be better and more acceptable.Submitted by yanaphon.t on
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