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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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In the 21st century, human
life
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 became more complex and
a
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apply
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competitive.
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, human being likes to live
their
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in their
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 favourite places
for
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to
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generate
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 good social
life
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. In
this
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 essay, I will explain what is the reason and problems related to human
migration
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.
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,
people
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moving
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 from one place to another
for
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 getting
better
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a better
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 choice of
life
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 as good education, health benefit and higher living standard. Admittedly, natural hazards like tsunami,earthquake and environmental pollution and man-made problems like destruction of
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the nuclear
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 power station,
spread
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the spread
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 of diseases
leads
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 to widespread movement of
people
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.
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, in Russia, the
Chernobl
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Chernobyl
 nuclear power station destruction caused more than 3 million
people
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's
migration
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 to
different
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a different
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part
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 of the country as well as other
european
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 nations. Ostensively, there is a growing tendency of
people
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's movement to
developed
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 country for making money or getting jobs.
Moroever
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, most of the leading cities now facing overpopulation and
higher
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 rate of crime because of excessive human
migration
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. Reportedly, religious intolerance and terrorism are one of the major social
problem
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problems
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 that curtails the peaceful
life
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 of society. To illustrate
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, according to Interpol report of 2018 points out that 70% of terrorist attacks in
UK
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the UK
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,France and America
caused
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are caused
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 by illegal migrated
people
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.
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, the more
people
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settled
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 down in
a specific regions
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specific regions
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, it will definitely
abolished
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 the natural resources and
other living organism
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another living organism
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. In conclusion, there is a saying 'a coin has two
sides'
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similarly
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,
migration
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 creates constructive and destructive changes in our society.
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, it is the responsibility of government authority and the local
people
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 to protect their own country and
also
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 generate human resources for future development.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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