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In many countries around the world it is common for families to run their own business. some people think that keeping the business within the family is the best approach while other believe this could lead to problems. What is your opinion?

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Around the world the idea of
family owned
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business
 is becoming more and more popular , some opine that it is a better way to run a
business
 while others believe that it will conflict within the family.
Although
this
 type of
business
 has some disadvantages, I believe that the advantages outweigh it.
To begin
 with , people who oppose the idea of
family owned
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business
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 base their argument on the fact that
this
 may disturb the peace and bring many avoided issues between family members.
For instance
 , family individuals may argue and fight about money issues and
this
 may lead to family disputes because issues will be more subjective than objective.
However
, there are much more benefits that come with a
family owned
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business
 .
On the contrary
 of the concept that it will lead to more conflict actually due to the fact that family members are working along with each other all day the bond between them will become stronger.
Moreover
 , the work schedule will be adjusted depending on the situation and the circumstances of each family member.
For example
 , some of them may be students and need some time off to focus on their studies and exams.
Furthermore
, any decisions that will be
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 will be in the best interest of the entire family.
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 the
business
 can be passed down through generations. And
last
 but not least the working atmosphere will be more relaxed and convenient . In conclusion, any type of
business
 has its own pros and cons.I tend to believe that a
business
 where all employees are family members have much more benefits than drawbacks.
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