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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter describe the item you lost explain how you lost it tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I hope you are doing amazing in your life. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the misplacement of my
bag
while
 travelling. I did my travel insurance through your company before my vacation. So, I would like a solution to
this
 problem from your company.
Firstly
, my tour was from Toronto to Winnipeg
last
 weekend for my friend's birthday and I took Air Canada for my travel. So, I had two bags with me and when I reached Winnipeg airport, I went to collect my suitcases but Unfortunately, I did not find my carry
bag
 suitcase. I forgot it
while
 getting off the plane.
Then
, I went to the lost and found department to ask them about it and they wrote my complaint. They told me that when they will find it, they will deliver it to my address. But, it's been a week and I returned back home without any information about my
bag
 and
then
 I got a message from their department that they were unable to find it.
However
, I remembered that I had done the insurance of my stuff including my ticket. I would like to get the cost of my
bag
 as it was a Gucci
bag
 in black colour. The cost was $1500 and I bought it
last
 month. So, I would like some compensation for my lost item through insurance. I hope to have a positive response and looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Daman
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task achievement
While your letter adequately describes the lost item and how it was lost, providing more specific details about the circumstances and your actions could strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring your ideas flow smoothly from one paragraph to the next. For example, explicitly linking how the lost and found department's response led you to claim insurance would create a more logical progression.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking up some of the larger paragraphs for better readability and to ensure each paragraph addresses one main idea clearly.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing statements are both polite and effective, which contributes positively to the tone of your letter.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a polite and suitable tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this kind of communication.
task achievement
You included all the necessary information, such as the description of the lost item, how it was lost, and what you would like the insurance company to do, making your response complete and clear.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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