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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps describe the changes in the city of Denham between 1986 and
present
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the present
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 day. Overall,
this
 city has more population than in 1986 and farmland has changed into the apartments. According to the maps indicate, in 1986 there were gardens in east rare of the
map
 but now
this
 has changed into
retirement
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a retirement
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 home and
this
 size
also
 has reduced than in 1986. East of the
map
 in 1986 had more farmland but present days
this
 has changed many houses. At present there are many new houses are available in the south rare of the
map
 than in 1986.
Primary
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A primary
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 school in
east
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the east
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 of the
map
 has expanded now to compared in 1986 period
by
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,by
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 contrast,
bridge
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the bridge
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also
 has reduced in now respectively. At present, many houses are surrounded by
bridge
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a bridge
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 way of
road
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the road
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. The
popualtion
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population
 of
the
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apply
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Denham city has been increased
at
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in
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present
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the present
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days
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day
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 than in 1986 and there are many areas had been changed in a modern way.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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