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Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that space programs should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #cost #space #exploration #programs #matter
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After finding the
evidences
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evidence
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 of water from the mars
people
 have become more curious about the
space
 and universe. Even,
people
thinks
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 that
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space
 programs should continue to explore more about the universe but on the other side, few
people
suggests
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 that the budget of
space
 exploration is too high
instead
 of it the same budget can
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 for different projects. To my way of thinking, I feel there are
lot
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 of things which need to be
explore
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 about the
space
 and it should
be continue
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 at any cost. Some demerits which
people
argues
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, that exploring
space
 is not only expensive but
also
 at
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 same
time
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 it is risky. Astronauts might
lost
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 in
the
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space
 , get crash while landing, might
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accident
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 with meteors.
For instance
, in 2002 NASA's spaceship named Apollo 2 mission was to land Astronauts from the
space
center
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 outside the earth, But something happened with the spaceship when they were at
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 of the earth. And
Spacecarft
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Spacecraft
 crashed on the atmosphere itself, and because of that 8 astronauts died.
In addition
, to make that
space
 shuttle
it
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cost around 500 million dollars which
was
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preety
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pretty
 high at that time.
At
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 the end,
this
 point makes the
people
 put their point strong on the disbelief of the
space
 programs. On the other side, few
people
 still
supports
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the
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space
 programs by explaining the recent success of
space
 exploration which help to understand more about the solar system. One of the recent
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 was India's
space
 organization named ISRO who launched the satellite called Chandrayaan. The mission of Chandryaan was to find the water particles on the moon with the help of laser scan EOS 2341 technology.
Eventually
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 they got succeded to find the water particles on the moon.
Also
, they found out the old river passage, from which it was concluded that there might be a river in the moon. In the conclusion,
Space
 exploration
is need
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is needed
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 for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of the mankind. Not only it will help us to find the new
possiblities
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possibilities
 to settle
in
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on
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 other planets
such
 as Mars or Neptune
,
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it will
also
 help
to
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us to
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 understand
about
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the creation of the earth.
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