The three pie charts show the production, consumption of coffee and where the profit goes around the world.
The first two pie charts present information about the consumption and production of
coffee
in four different countries. The third
pie chart describes the profit distribution in four categories such
as delivery, retailers, exporters and producers.
Overall
, the consumption of coffee
is highest in Europe and America, whereas
South Africa is the largest coffee
producer. Moreover
, the biggest profit in the coffee
business is made by delivery services.
First of all, America and Europe consume coffee
four times as much as the rest of the world. Japan produces 18% of coffee
in the world while
consuming only 8%.
South Africa produces 44% coffee
which is double that of Indonesia. Belong
Wrong verb form
Belonging
from
South Africa and Indonesia, Japan and Vietnam produce approximately the same amount of Change preposition
to
coffee
.
According to
the profit distribution chart, more than half of the earnings is
received from Correct subject-verb agreement
are
coffee
distribution. Retailers receive around a quarter of revenues while
the producers have only 15 per cent. The remaining 10 per cent of the total amount of income is acquired from exporters.Submitted by samin.harraf on
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