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Every year, several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Each year, several
languages
 are in danger of extinction. Some
people
 believe that if the number of
languages
 decreased, life would be simpler. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 view because
languages
 dying out would lead to disadvantaged issues. On the one hand, the
language
 disease would result in a reduction in the number of job opportunities. As there are currently various
languages
 in the world, numerous translator positions are needed to help locals to approach overseas media. If those
languages
 dropped, translators would lose their jobs.
For instance
, more than 20% of Vietnamese
people
 are earning by writing subtitles for Western movies or translating English articles into Vietnamese, so it would be hard for them if the
language
 became loose. Another reason why life would be tougher with fewer
languages
 is that it is too hard for
people
 to study new
languages
. Because of the difference in sentence structures, vocabulary and accents that distinct
languages
 have. To illustrate, the government in China failed to make English an official
language
 since Chinese characters are totally different from English words, and
people
 have struggled to learn it
although
 they have been trying for a long time. In conclusion, the decrease in
languages
 could be a vital problem. Life would be more difficult when a few
languages
 exist because
this
 would affect job opportunities and learning global
languages
 is not as easy as learning a native
language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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