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Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.

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According to research, many teenagers nowadays prefer to socialize online rather than in person. While
this
 may be true to a certain extent, I would argue that there are many young
people
 who prefer to meet one another in person. On the one hand, it is understandable why some young
people
 prefer meeting someone on the Internet to in person. The key rationale is that technology and social networks are developing day by day.
Therefore
, young
people
, who are the generation exposed to technology a lot, are increasingly dependent on the online world.
On the other hand
, there are still many methods for teenagers to meet face-to-face.
For example
, schools or universities may organize festival activities to help young
people
 bond together. Another solution is that teenagers can actively create discovery trips together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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