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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, as more consumer
goods
 are manufactured, more damages have been inflicted on the
environment
.
This
 article will outline several reasons for
this
 and point out the appropriate solutions.
To begin
 with, the
production
 of
goods
 tends to harm the
environment
 in two main ways which are the chemical by-products from the manufacturing process and the mass
production
 of disposable
goods
.
Firstly
, since more
goods
 are produced, more toxic waste and emissions are released into nature from the factories.
For example
, carbon dioxide causes greenhouse phenomena and any chemicals that disastrously contaminate the water, air and soil environments. These chemicals can affect the
environment
 in the long run.
Secondly
, to fulfil the ever-increasing demands of the customers, more single-use products
such
 as plastic cups with more affordable prices are introduced. Indeed, most of those products are non-biodegradable and have a short lifespan.
Hence
, that will soonly turn the planet into a landfill and pose a threat to all alive creatures. Actions must be taken as soon as possible to minimize the adverse impacts of mass
production
 on nature.
Firstly
, governments should encourage a sustainable manufacturing process.
For instance
, in the US, governments put lower taxes on businesses that use renewable and green energy to manufacture. By doing so, the manufacturing process emits less chemical waste into the
environment
.
Secondly
, companies should introduce sustainable products to the markets.
For example
, people can
also
 change to canvas shopping bags for eternal use
instead
 of plastic bags that can be used one or two times. To abridge, there are two main reasons why the increase in
production
 harms the
environment
. To address
this
 issue, governments and companies should join hands to make the
production
 lines more environmentally friendly. ,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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