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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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In the past two ,decades one of the major issues that humanity is facing is the inability to produce enough
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 for the growing world population.
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 many are suggesting that to solve
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 genetically modified
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 should be introduced. In
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 I will be discussing why I believe that
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 shortage
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 that the world is facing but it will not solve it.
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 poses a serious health issue to
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 and the environment. Studies have shown that
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-related issues have increased in the past 10 years within children from age 3 to 7 due to the popularity of genetically engineered
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, genetically modified crops are believed to be dangerous and deadly to them which affect the balance of our ecosystem.
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, it causes unwanted residual effects and can remain in the soil for an extended period of time which may cause damage to the agriculture sector. Another major issue that comes with genetically engineered
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 is that the production of
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 will be dominated by a few powerful biotechnology companies.
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. We cannot ignore the benefit that genetically modified
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 has brought to us, most importantly is the fact we are able to produce more
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,
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 has helped alleviate the hunger
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 that the world is facing,
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 to that crops are more resistant to disease and fewer pesticides are used and
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 but not least the
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 can be given a better flavour and texture. To sum up,
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 genetically modified
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 may help to reduce the
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 of hunger by producing more products in a cheap fast way.
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major consequences that will affect our health and environment.
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