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Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer?

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Certain
movies
 are designed for
peoples
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people
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 to think, because of their serious genre, while other
type
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 of scripted films
are
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is
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 used as
source
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a source
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 of amusement and entertainment. To my choice, I always prefer to watch
movies
 which are made for the purpose of
delightment
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delighting
delighted
 rather than being serious.
To begin
 with, in present circumstances due to busy and hectic schedule and in
race
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the race
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 of money one’s life has becomes so complicated that the means of entertaining ourselves has phenomenally reduced.
In addition
,
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 pandemic comes in to
further
 restrict us to the home and lessen more opportunities
of
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 entertainment outdoor.
For example
, sports activities decreased
to
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due to
this
 contagious disease outspread.
Therefore
, entertaining
movies
 can be the prime source of relieving stress.
Although
 entertaining
movies
serves
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 a purpose of not relieving stress, but
also
 a lesson at the end of the day
such
 as
,
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 future scientific depiction.
For instance
, as they did how robots will take over humans by 2050 in the "Transformers" movie. On contrary to
this
, serious
movies
 have failed to bring happiness
on
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 peoples face
thus
 a decline in viewership of these has been seen over
last
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 five years as comedy
movies
has
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 started to form in abundance on
low
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 budget with
better
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 story. Sometimes a movie with a message help to extract negative thought script and criminals may get a chance to benefit of in planning their criminal activity like it
was happened
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happened
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 in
USA
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the USA
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, a bank robbery was taken place and when the culprits interviewed they unveiled being
inspirant
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inspired
 of famous series "breaking bad" in which writer had portrayed a picture of how a thief plan to
robber
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the robber
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 and
then
 escaped unhide from the cops, while the main purpose of
this
 movie to highlight the positive image of police among peoples. In
conclusions
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, to
me
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 it is a better decision to go with entertaining
movies
, because of combo genre of
screen plays
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screenplays
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 serve both purposes
such
 as comedy and a
take home
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take-home
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 message at the same time.
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