Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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support the idea that

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of diet and cooking subject should be in

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should study other essential programs

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of ingredients subjects are important and every

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for entertaining students.

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for daily life that upgrade their

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which is every

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should learn and know about

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and Diet Institution has said that

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should understand about several nutritions and

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get sick that must be cut off. From

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think that the

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has many benefits for daily life which should be a primary

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the latter views that the

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preparation

food program is important and

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student

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students

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should learn for living in the future.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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