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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.Other say that there are more important enviromental problem. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some have the opinion that the extinction of certain
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 is the main environmental problem of our time. While others are of an opinion that there are more significant environmental problems
besides
this
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both options in detail. On the one hand, an
issue
 like wiping out certain
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 can disrupt the whole food chain.
This
 can
cause
 some cascading effects and the result like increase in
pollution
 of other
species
 or wiping out of some
species
. Which can be either good or bad. An example of
such
 extension is of dinosaurs led to the emergence of humans. So the effect on the environment by
this
 problem cannot be certain. These
issues
 can be treated to creatin
species
 of
plants
 and
animals
 but not all ecosystems. But
on the other hand
, an
issue
 like global warming, air
pollution
, etc. are a threat to so entire ecosystem.
This
issue
 if not handled can extend all the life of the planet.
Issues
 like global warming can
cause
 the melting of ice which can lead to submerge of various lifeforms living on the land resulting in the extinction of
species
 surviving on land. Air
pollution
 is a root
cause
 of many health
issues
 not only in humans but
also
 in other
animals
species
.
Plants
 are
also
 dying out due to these
issues
. Water
pollution
 is t of entire marine life. These
issues
 are at a global scale that needs more attention because are not the only threat to the entire lifecycle of
animals
 and
plants
 on the earth. In conclusion,
Although
 wiping out certain
plants
 and
animals
 is problematic to the environment it is limited to the small number of
species
. While environmental a problem like global warming, air and water
pollution
, etc. may
cause
 the extinction of entire life on the earth.
This
issue
 needs to be taken more seriously.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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