In many societies around the world, populations are aging rapidly, leading to unsustainable increase in public health costs. The population of country must pay for health care in the future. Do you agree or disagree with statement?
In many
countries
across the globe
aged Add a comma
,globe
population
is growing quickly which leads to unsustainable growth in public health
care
funds. The people of that country should be responsible for their health
care
support in the upcoming time. This
essay completely agrees with the statement because the shortage of government
funds and medical support staff services leads to increase
in public Correct article usage
an increase
health
care
costs.
The citizens of country
should Add an article
the country
a country
be pay
for their Change the verb form
be paid
be paying
health
care
provider in upcoming
time because Correct article usage
the upcoming
inadequate
Change preposition
of inadequate
government
fund
. In most Fix the agreement mistake
funds
countries
, half of the population
is not paying taxes regularly, as a result
, government run
out of Add a hyphen
government-run
fund
for Add an article
the fund
health
care
systems
to run centralize
Wrong verb form
centralized
health
care
systems
for the ageing people. For instance
, in sout
Correct your spelling
south
aftrica
, most Correct your spelling
Africa
countries
' people are not paying taxes to Correct your spelling
federal
fedral
Correct article usage
the fedral
government
as a result
government
fails to provide medication to senior citizen
.
In most Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
countries
senior citizens Add a comma
,countries
requires
constant attention from Change the verb form
require
medical
service Add an article
a medical
provider
Change the noun form
providers
such
as nurse and physiotherapist. Each government regulated
nursing home Add a hyphen
government-regulated
facilities
requires skilled staff and Fix the agreement mistake
facility
equipments
which adds Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
significant
Correct article usage
a significant
amout
of strain on public Correct your spelling
amount
health
care
funds. For instance
, in the United Kingdom nursing facilities run
by the Add a missing verb
are run
government
which
puts more pressure on Correct pronoun usage
apply
government
health
care
systems
to accommodate each individuals
daily medical needs.
In conclusion, in many Change to a genitive case
individual's
countries
senior Add a comma
,countries
population
is increasing which leads to increase
in public Correct article usage
an increase
health
care
costs because citizens of the country are not playing their role and ageing
Correct article usage
the ageing
population
daily needs puts
additional pressure on Wrong verb form
put
government
healthcare systems
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