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Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling, while others think it should be taught in school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Talking about the vitality of recycling some people have
this
 notion that
children
 should learn that from their
parents
,
However
, others believe it should be learnt in
school
. I think it is the responsibility of both the
parents
 and the
school
. On the one hand,
firstly
children
 should learn to separate the waste at home.
Parents
 should encourage their offspring about the important role of separating wastes and inform them about these environmental impacts, so
children
 will know the consequences of neglecting and
follow
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 their
parents
 rule.
Secondly
,
children
 obey their
parents
 and act the same as they do. Since
parents
 are the role model for their
children
 and every child try to imitate their
parents
' behaviour, if they see their respectful action towards the environment they will follow them and see the importance of recycling.
Therefore
, I think
parents
 should teach their offspring
by
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their behaviour at home.
On the other hand
, we cannot deny the important role of
school
 in treating a child.
firstly
, teachers can force
children
 to separate their wastes at
school
 and consider it as a part of their score.
Therefore
,
children
 have to do that and after a while with great motivation, it will become their habit.
Secondly
,schools can bring
children
 to the recycling companies in their community so
children
 will see the effort in those places for saving goods and feel the exact meaning of the importance of recycling. In conclusion, I believe both
parents
 at home and teachers at schools should try their best to teach
children
 about the importance of recycling.
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