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some people think secondary school students should learn international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views ang give your opinion

#people #school #students #news #subjects #waste #time #ang
globalization is an inevitable trend today. people recommend that teens should have
time
 for what is going on in the world, but
somes
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some
 said there is no
time
 for
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unnecessary
subject
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. in my point of
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 support
to
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the
first
 one. in terms of the main aspect, studying many subjects
such
 as math, chemistry,
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,... is very stressful. so they
wont
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 have
time
 for another subject which can
also
 make them
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in
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 learning in school. leads o less
time
 to rest and support their family. in another aspect, learning international things will help students understand more about global society.
then
 they can easily receptivity, recognize and be more alert about information. if students know the importance of knowledge for the future of the world, they will be more motivated to study.
such
 a statue, children in middle school often have
dream
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 for their future so that they can be
attacted
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attached
attracted
 to news more than classic subjects. when they have
passion
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a passion
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to
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 something, they are willing to spend their
time
on
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studying. in conclusion,
internatinal
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international
 news is an
in dispensable
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 element in the learning process of students. they should be taught from now to have a better awareness.
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